Sun Rise and Set

Its a poem I did for the heck of it about the sunrise and the sunset

Sunrise

 

Life revives as the sun mounts higher

Dreams unravel with the blossoms

And streaks cry outwards into the trees

 

Grass giggles with gladness

As the frost transforms to dew

Birds fly to get the wet worm

 

Scents of pine and oak tingle the nose

Newly found rays burn the eyes

And a picture of perfect harmony arises

 

Alas, time elapses with the morning’s breeze

The sun plays tag with the horizon

And sunrise merges to the sunset

 

Blues and blacks dance on reflecting water

The owl hoots watching them dance

Then everything fades to a peaceful darkness

 

Sunset

Author's Note

I guess... just tell me what you think

Reviews

[G. K. Bostic]

I think it's delightful, that's what I think! :) I love the image of the sun playing tag with the horizon.....nice!

[ImJustAMisguidedGhost]

A very nicely done imagery in this poem. I agree as well, it flows very smoothly. The subject itself is already wonderful, and you brought it out even more greatly and truly captured it. Great write(: I like it a lot.

[deeps]

This is ever so lovely and so well written.
I like this write alot.

"Alas, time elapses with the morning’s breeze
The sun plays tag with the horizon
And sunrise merges to the sunset"

I really enjoyed this stanza.
This is wonderful.

[steph]

this is so adoreable. this piece makes me want to go out and play with the rising sun... It has excellent discription, better the some of the other work you've done, and you have an excellent painting here with your words... Terrific job.. It was such a blessing reading this....

[GrandDystopia]

Now i'm the first to admit that i'm not the biggest fan of poetry but i liked this.
Very well written, you turned something as simple as a sunset into something otherworldly and i liked that. Cool

[writing_for_you]

well written

[Safe&sound<3 ♫]

nicely written(: it's very well said, speaks to everyone and is amazing!

[E.H. Monroe]

A one shot, one kill from the mistress of many things.

This is what happens when you bottle mother nature and seel her back to us at full price.

Nicely done

[Tommy]

A picturesque seen you have expressed; I long for spring when the snow is gone and this beautiful vision can transpire before my eyes again. You have brought sunlight to the cold and dreary winter expression of season.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Proletariat Uprising]

I find the wonderful thing about poetry is, when well-written, it can create beautiful images in one's mind. You do that splendidly.

This is just an aside, and has absolutely nothing to do with anything, and isn't a complaint or anything, but whatever happened to rhyme? I know that metre is more important and whatnot, but just musing. Anyways, top notch work, perfect score for you.