Before I go

This is my first attempt back into Songwriting.... plz go easy on me....

The morning sunrise can't undo what once was so true

Eyes so blue/ Oh boy how I fell hard for you

Midnight love we made/ But only one heart paid

Tell me do you remember me/

Or am I just some other gal/

That played a part in your lonely world

Oh how I need to know/ 

If it was as true for you/

Because I can't undo

The way I long for you

Tell me that you love me so/

Because I need to know/

Before I go

If your heart aches

How many takes must I have before I can play the lead role/

Of your broken soul

Because I can't undo 

The way I long for you

See I don't think you understand/

That i'm that girl that will always hold your hand/

Please tell me I was more than a one night stand

Tell me that you love me so

Because baby I need to know

Before I go

Reviews

[ROSALIND]

Such a lonely sad tale enjoyed ........Often we are used by the other sex time and time again.

[Flutterby aish]

Reallly nice n really deep!!!!!!!

[Danielle]

Thank you, appreciate that you think it is deep, I try always to write from the heart.

[Flutterby aish]

Well this one ws certainly frm the heart.......the poem reflects that!!!!! ;)

[Danielle]

Thank You very much

[Flutterby aish]

;)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Sweet...........I write songs too, but have a bad habit of not giving them a chorus....so I am not very good at it myself. You did a good job Shia.

[Danielle]

Thanks a bunch

[spiritwind]

I am just hopeless at reading song lyrics... I very seldom hear any music going on in rhythm or rhyme... I did however hear it in this simple two line stanza:
" Because I can't undo
The way I long for you "
Sorry I lack the qualifications to be of a better help to you

[Danielle]

I appreciate your comment anyways. Thank u