We own this night

A song about love....

It's the beginning of the night/ this could not be more right
Scented candles are lit/ all along my hope that this was it

Fragile emotions I hold deep within/ pushing away the boys that aren't men/
Can't believe it has come true/ the promise I found in you

This road has been hard/ and to my surprise finally I picked the right card
Belonging to a path so tragic and dull/ you showed me the magical

My world once a tragedy/ you set that free from me
Are you an angel in disguise/ Could it be you have opened my eyes

We own this night/ I realize

I could never find a love greater/ that is true sir
You kissed these tears/ healed the heartache through the years

Taught me to dance in the turqoise rain/ accept my beautiful pain
With you I am not afraid/ with you I will never fade

As long as the stars dance up in the sky/ it will always be you and I
As long as the flowers bloom/ never be destined for doom

We are evidently meant to be/ two souls flying free
No longer in seach of you/ No longer in search of me

We own this night/ all along I stayed strong
All along you are the love written in this song

We own this night

Author's Note

Please review with constructive criticism....I am making an effort to get back into songwriting, hope to publish someday so I need to know if I have what it takes....

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Rob Santana]

These are some pretty good lyrics. I too want to learn how to write better lyrics.

[Danielle]

Thank You

[luviva]

okay. it is great trust me.
you owned it just like you owned that night with your man in the song.
you definately got what it takes!

[Danielle]

Thanks a bunch

[luviva]

yo welcome..

[Shane Blackheart]

Wonderful, I really liked this. It was very beautiful. As I read this I tried to pass it through my mind as if it were a song, and it worked for me. I do honestly think you have what it takes. Your rhyme and the rhythm in general you have going with this are great in my opinion. I'm not really good at poetry or song writing myself, so I can't be the best critic, but I can say that I did like this. Keep going with it.

[Danielle]

Thank you so much

[spiritwind]

nice creation of the mood
most of your rhymes are smooth and unforced

[Danielle]

Thank u

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a beautiful song Shia, absolutely beautiful. Have you had any of your lyrics

[Danielle]

Thank You much, I'm not sure of your question though?

[PurpleQuartz]

You have what it takes.

[Danielle]

Thank you so much

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

you have wonderful structure and are great with rhyming! keep it up, i definitely felt the mood here(:

[Danielle]

Thank you very much