From Father To Son

A poem from the perspective of a dead father to his son...

From Father To Son

 

I see him growing,

Each day learning,

Step by step.

How I wish I could hold hand as he learned to walk.

How I wish I could lend him my shoulder to cry on.

But all I do is watch

From a distance that none of us can cross…

For I am no more than

A source of energy,

Unusable…

No more than a gust of wind,

I cannot touch him,

Or, hold him.

So helpless, so powerless...

He cannot listen to me,

My reasons to leave.

I have watched him cry,

Over that photograph of me,

The only memory…

 Fading but still there.

Maybe, I am just a figment

Of his imagination.

That I can only exist

In his memories…

For now I live among the dead…

 

But so long as he remembers his dad,

I want him to know,

That I, his father, left him

Because I loved him more dearly,

Than my life itself…

 

Author's Note

Wrote this randomly. I thought it might be a good change to write something from the perspective of a person that no longer exists, rather than highlighting the pain of the one who is left behind. Because, the loss is felt from both the sides... Please review. :)

Reviews

[Emily]

Love the connection between father and son!
Great write!

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot Emily! :)

[Roshan Nair]

These are such deeply moving words you've used shivangi. I loved every bit of it. Its as though you stepped into shoes of another to fill the beings emotions into this piece. Its not an easy task I must say.
Great work :)

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot Roshan! I rally appreciate it!:)

[ANTO]

moonlight this piece - It is very moving - it also throws up some very interesting metaphysical ideas - overall though I would say the sentimentality overrides that and I was deeply affected by the time I reached the end. I like that...
thank you

[Moonlight]

Thank you for your kind words ANTO! :)

[El Chico]

i liked it for perspective. The poem makes you think of the other side of the relationship loss, a pleasant surprise to the reader for it leaves you wondering. Thanks for sharing !

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot El Chico! :) Really appreciate your review! :)

[Lizardo]

Randomly and nailed it
This really touch my heart (specially since I don't have father, don't know where the guy is)
But this is really touching.
You have great poem here, I love it

[Moonlight]

I'm sorry about your dad... I hope he finds his way back to you someday...
I really appreciate your review! Thanks a lot, Lizardo :)

[Ryan Henderson]

So sad and distant, yet beautiful and hopeful. I really like this piece and look forward to reading more like it! Keep writing!

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot for your review! I'm glad you liked it.. :)

[Cool Girl]

Beautiful! Keep up the good work!

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot!

[Cool Girl]

Welcome! :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Wonderful..... i liked it....

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot! :)

[Lost_And_Found]

I really like this more "unconventional" choice of perspective. Inspiring idea!
Also, nice ending!

[Moonlight]

Thanks a lot! :)