Today Much Like Yesterday

true emotions

All the rooms I have sat in,

Yet i feel its not just my face you have spat in,

Today like yesterday I cannot cry,

I wonder what it would be like if I could fly,

I would go far away,

would anyone miss me or want me to stay,

Does anyone care,

For a love for me does anyone bare,

I will scream,

A life I could live on a single dream,

For once id be free,

And flow in the breeze like a willow tree;

Author's Note

Tell me if i need to change anything..

Reviews

[PaleWriter]

I think it's natural to want to get away from those who hurt us. Being able to fly would cure a lot of stress I'll bet.

Here's what I would change. Notice the punctuation and two lines changed.

All my emotions are trapped in.
I feel its not just my face you have spat in.
Today, like yesterday, I cannot cry.
I wonder what it would be like to fly?

I would go far away.
Would anyone miss me or want me to stay?
Does anyone care?
A love for me does anyone bare?

I could drift on a moonbeam.
A life I could live on a single dream.
For once i'd be free,
And flow in the breeze like a willow tree.

[Sikandar Khan]

Really True Emotions
Would anyone miss me or want me.to stay this question i asked also to myself.daiky if i die who will miss me

[shyla]

its a everyday struggle..

[Sikandar Khan]

Yeah Life is Full of Struggle

[lua]

a poem of raw emotion, this speaks of those moments one just wants to run away and start over

[apennylate]

Succinct breath spacing, and well counted syllable usage, has a heavy feel to it. Plenty of heady emotion packed into each line.

*I will scream,
A life I could live on a single dream,*

Excellent, not much on telling anyone to "change" writing, but keep up the clean pacing and gritty stuff... Kudos

[shyla]

Thank you i work hard on everything i do and enjoy when i have new learning experiences.

[apennylate]

No worries, anytime. Keep enjoying the learning experience through your writing.