The Warrior's Way

You shall fall and die

And your blood will be splattered

Like a bed of roses torn with thorns

Upon the softly inviting Earth

 

Upon your marble stone epitaph

Bluebirds will sing gallant songs

Of valor, courage and unwavering grit

For every moment that you lived

 

Out of your adamantine bones

The country's spine shall be wrought

And from your impassioned heart

The nation's love will be birthed

 

From your blood will ceaselessly flow

Endless oceans of unconditional love

And the river of words in your lifetime

Will echo truth till the end of days

 

So move past the current of conformity

For the past might be a sea of horrors

But with valor, courage and grit

And the ever so magical human spirit

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The times shall change 

As the past's consumed by fire

Sparked by raging heart’s desire

Reviews

[Robin]

the warrior's spirit , glorified and raised upon the pedestal of honor throughout the ages , the tale of the survivor , the conqueror and the scribe , the course of change , and here I sit , thinking , of the blood spilled , the spirit finding peace in death , and perhaps someday , when peace will fill our light

[Everett DeValle]

A really deep write, Siddhartha...I loved your use of language and the vivid imagery...I remember reading a book on Bushido, the way of the warrior, for some business enhancement learning...it was a fun read. Your represents the never say die spirits of past warriors and present warriors of today. Nicely done.

[jhumur]

a warrior's story through a poet's ink!! looks like spark & warmth!!

[Jasmine]

the ending is very powerful, made more so by the rhyme.
A really enjoyable and well-written poem. Thank you for sharing!

[Mockingbird]

brings to mind an oracle imparting prophesy to a warrior of things to come and his fate, but by his blood times shall change.

[Marie]

You stated in your profile that you don't want mindless flattery but constructive criticism. So I'll try to give some. First, let me say that your poem is very good. It has a good flow and is free of mistakes, which cannot be said for many poems on this site.
In the first verse you used the pronouns "thee" and "thy", then changed to "you" and "yours" in subsequent stanzas. This does not seem consistant, though you may have had a reason.
In the fourth stanza you used the ending word "tine" twice in a row. I suggest it wuld read better if the last line of this verse was "Will echo truth till the end of days.
The last three lines don't seem to fit with the ret of the poem, but that may be my problem.
I hope to see more of your work. I checked it out because of your name.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This warrior revealed itself to me in many facets. I get the feeling I'd like to be on his/her side...
Nice flow and content. Thank you.

[Cassie Fraga]

wow Sid... that was a great write... RAW with a hint of beauty... very nice my friend!!

[patricia]

The fourth stanza in this was so beautiful, and the fifth stanza especially it's last line was outstanding. Thankyou.