A Dangerous Mind

Got my brain hit by a ravishing young lady who swept me off my feet the instant I laid my sight upon her. But she just like an evil mind had me twisted and bit me to loose my red wine.

I was smitten by a drop-dead gorgeous girl

Never I thought I would drool over her captivating curl

When she approached me for a wild acquaintance

Realized later that I was so jammy to have created a distance

One fine sundown, I bumped into her again

Did it happen by chance or just in vain?

Couldn’t get my brain indulged in an invasion

I always missed gorging wine on a beguiling occasion

Voila! I hooked myself up with her

She thought to bestow me with a murmur

I was down on my knees to propose a toast

The lass swindled me the most

I asked myself why me Oh Lord

There was an echo in the air you lacked striking a chord

Never I would take a plunge into the sea of love

Pardon me for I lost a priceless dove

Reviews

[John F Carver]

What else rhymes with girl? Maybe swirl and distance doesn't even sound like it rhymes with acquaintance and it don't. Try something more like peculiar similar sounds like ending the with the "the saint is," or "the paint is." See how they tend to rhyme and distance just doesn't. Hope it was helpful, or I just thought of another "he was in a faint sense." See how fun it is. What was I thinking of, only to rhyme but I loved it when I found something that rhymed with love other than dove and hope you will too.

[Siddharth]

Thanks Mr. Poika for your feedback. I think I have a lot to learn & grasp the basic concepts of penning down the thoughts in form of poetry.