If I Could Make A Difference

The tears in some eyes

The cloudiest skies

Wondering why

Do so many die?

 

If I could make a difference

I'd change the entire world

I'd try to stop the fighting

I'd unravel what is curled.

 

The laughs in the voices

There are so many choices

To choose between right

and why it could be so wrong.

 

The hurt of a child

A mind running wild

A house perfectly tiled

But still an Earth that's un-filed.

 

If I could make a difference

I'd change the entire world

I'd try to stop the fighting

I'd unravel what is curled

 

The wonder in a mind

How they could be so unkind

Perhaps the day that my world finds

a change we wont feel so blind

 

The hate in a killer

His shotgun is his thriller

While children get much iller

we stop turning all those thriller's

 

If I could make a difference

I'd change the entire world

I'd try to stop the fighting

I'd unravel what was curled.

 

Reviews

[cest la vie]

I really liked the message you were conveying. Your message just flowed so well and I really liked it!!

[Lunar Lightning]

I enjoy the message in this poem. Though I think that you could have focused less on trying to rhyme and more on good word choice. I like how you chose to repeat one particular portion of the poem, that added a lot in a way. Great job.

Luna