That warrior.

Aren't  they  those diamonds that fell out of your twinkling eyes on a starry night,

Aren't they those arms that fought with the world like they were owned by one of the bravest knights,

Aren't they those lips that when spoke the world smiled with the longest smile,

Isn't it that body that once was maintained so well but now was the mess of this world,

Isn't she that warrior that once walked with so much pride but now seems to disappear,

Isn't that the same girl who once looked out for love but now completely hates it,

Isn't that name on the grave stone of the warrior who was feared of none other than death.

Author's Note

Reviews needed. (:

Reviews

[KWP]

Another poem with strong content ... I like the feeling behind it very much.
Not sure if I like the repetition of Aren't and Isn't .. they distract me, they are also non-descriptive words to start off each line of a poem that is set out to startle the reader .. I think with a little twisting of the words you could perhaps drop them all together.

[Simran Kewlani]

I will. I will try to change them. Thank you. (:

[KittyVenus]

beautiful! XD

i love this!!!

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you.(:

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I Totally agree with Jharna Here Great Work. Strong warrior nice Work thank you for sharing. Blessings

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you! This is one of my favourites. I appreciate you for reading this poem.

[xDalliance]

My favorite poem! The soldier expresses the life of him so gracefully and it brings out the emotion of sadness amazingly. Just awesome, I would say!

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you. This is my personal favourite as well. (:

[Sarah Coll]

This has a nice twist to it, I agree that I wasn't expecting that ending! None the less I like where you took this poem, it seems well thought out with a nice flow and a neat form!
Great write, will definitely be looking out for your work!

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you Sarah. I wanted to add a twist and I kinda got it.

[Frieda P]

Woo I wasn't expecting that ending Simran! Outstanding read, this one came from somewhere deep within your soul....! Kudos. :-)

[Simran Kewlani]

Thank you Frieda. This poem kinda suddenly struck my mind. It's not something I actually worked on. (:

[Frieda P]

Oooh don't you just love when that happens? :-) Was my pleasure, truly...

[Simran Kewlani]

I do. A lot. The poems end up being better than the ones I actually work on. (:

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was very good Simran. Only thing I think the first line should not have the word "that". It should just be ." Aren't they those diamonds that fell out of your twinkling eyes on a starry night,". I think unless you wrote it this way.Otherwise most excellent :)

[Simran Kewlani]

I shall correct it. Thank you.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Simran Kewlani]

I did that by mistake. :(

[Vidya Bacchus]

It happens to us all no worries :)