Actors we are

A blip of angry thought...

Wading through our timeline like mindless drones...
Acting out societal norms like A-list clones...
A white picket fence and stale office coffee persist...
While a selected few are brave enough to run undaunted through the mist...
Desires and dreams remain locked up in a mental jail...
Unrealized potential floats in the ether until our death nail.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

There are so many truths and emotions packed into this tight little poem. A real powerhouse in its simplicity.

[Steve L.]

I appreciate the review. Thank you!

[Lydia Shutter]

Brings to mind the Shakespeare quote, "All the world's a stage and all the men and women merely players". It does seem that way some days, yes. Your line "wading through the timeline like mindless drones" paints an awesome picture. Desires and dreams must be allowed to roam free....but so often they are not. An intensely emotive write. Good one. Lydi**

[Steve L.]

Wow!! Thank you, Lydia!! You always give very intelligent reviews.

[Eve Ola]

very captivating title and thought.you used best possible words to express this thought especially in last two lines

[Steve L.]

I really appreciate you thoughtful review. Thank you!

[Eve Ola]

ur welcome Steve

[Briana O'Connor]

Ah such a wrenching tale of conformity. I love the expression and the way you express genuine emotion towards a topic that pollutes the world. thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.

[Steve L.]

Thank you, Briana!

[AprilRN1210]

yea... I have to agree, you write with so much more PASSION when not worrying about the rhymes... screw em... say what you want to say... It takes away from the emotion.. you say this is an "angry rant", but I don't FEEL it... know what I mean?.... tell me what you want to say.... don't hold back!! I know you have it in you.. lol
I have seen it!!

[Steve L.]

Very well stated and I agree. I feel constrained when I try to rhyme.

[AprilRN1210]

I am learning to write without them too.. makes me nervous.. but hey, some people write so much better without them.. and the one piece I read earlier made me FEEL so profoundly, that it lets me know that you are one of those people.. it was such a powerful piece and I felt the raw emotion.. this one... I want to FEEL the anger... carefully chosen powerful words make a bigger impact than rhyme any day... :)

[Steve L.]

Yes they do!! I am very grateful for your advice :)

[AprilRN1210]

anytime sir:)