A Letter to Self

A Screenplay by Sky Writer

Hello You,

How are you ? It's been tough you see, these times, it's just so hard to breath sometimes. No matter how many people would say that 'It's gonna be okay', the truth is, you don't need to hear that lie from them, at all. You used to be happy all the time. I wonder what happened. Life sucked so bad, your life. At least other people are doing better, having a good life, getting regularized on their jobs, finding new friends, they really are a little bit better than you.

But how dare you compare your life to theirs ?

You're not them, idiot. You are trying so hard but at least you have a small circle of friends who really care for you and will stand up for you, no matter what. At least you got a job, no matter how much you hate it and no matter how much it feels like hell. It's okay if you cut yourself because of the pain, I understand. That feeling that you want to convey but people just won't listen to you.

How come ?

How come they only care about how you look ? Why do they only want you to be seen as somebody with a good image doing the right things to do ? Can't you do what you want ? Why do they expect so much in you when you're just an ant in a crowd.

You want to run away. You just want to go. Escape. Leave.

They are not worthy. One day, you just want to stop listening to them and listen to yourself instead. It'd been a while since you do something you want to do, buy something you want to have.

I know you want to go. Be free. Live life the way you want to. No standards. No comparison. Just you and your happiness.

But please, before you do, before you break away, before you go out of your comfort zone, of your country of origin, at least make yourself happy.

You Deserve It.

Regards,

Your Past

© 2016 Sky Writer

Author's Note

This is only a thought !

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My thoughts placed in a timeline

Before the full read: Enticing. You have a good hook and made me curious about what was to come next. How will this author develop? How will the recipient interpret this message? I instantly wanted to know more

During the read: I thought the writing was attentive to emotions but got mixed up at times with POV's. Sometimes it felt like I was reading the recipients thoughts instead of thoughts of the author of the letter. I think having a strong establishment of who the author is and what they know and don't know before writing will create a stronger narrative - especially if we can get a sense of timeline. What I mean is we know this is a letter to oneself based on the title, but we don't know if this is a letter from one's future self or past self. I like that you withheld that information until the end, but it often felt that the past self was assigning the emotions of the present self. How would they know? This is just an opinion of art, but I personally think the beauty and pain that comes with our past self addressing us in the present timeline is the hopeful naive nature of the mindset that comes with the past self. We didn't know who we'd become. I think you should lean into that. If the letter is from the past, really put yourself in those shoes. What can be only known through observation but not felt? How does the past self feel about what they're seeing? I think a two parter of this would make it even more beautiful. A reply to the sender from the present self to follow-up answering questions/explaining what the original sender observed. This would make a great platform for those emotions to really shine raw and unapologetically.

Final Thoughts: A painful and relatable piece of work. I think that makes for a great base. I think right now it's condensed and can be unpacked even further. I do think there's a lot of beauty, however; as a reader feeling as if the recipient voice is breaking through and overtaking. There's a strong overall sense of yearning in this piece. A feeling of wanting to be seen so badly. Although my main criticism is related to the voice of the author feeling lost or overshadowed at times, it's kinda poetic justice in a way. Thank you for the good read :)

Posted 4 Months Ago

My thoughts placed in a timeline

Before the full read: Enticing. You have a good hook and made me curious about what was to come next. How will this author develop? How will the recipient interpret this message? I instantly wanted to know more

During the read: I thought the writing was attentive to emotions but got mixed up at times with POV's. Sometimes it felt like I was reading the recipients thoughts instead of thoughts of the author of the letter. I think having a strong establishment of who the author is and what they know and don't know before writing will create a stronger narrative - especially if we can get a sense of timeline. What I mean is we know this is a letter to oneself based on the title, but we don't know if this is a letter from one's future self or past self. I like that you withheld that information until the end, but it often felt that the past self was assigning the emotions of the present self. How would they know? This is just an opinion of art, but I personally think the beauty and pain that comes with our past self addressing us in the present timeline is the hopeful naive nature of the mindset that comes with the past self. We didn't know who we'd become. I think you should lean into that. If the letter is from the past, really put yourself in those shoes. What can be only known through observation but not felt? How does the past self feel about what they're seeing? I think a two parter of this would make it even more beautiful. A reply to the sender from the present self to follow-up answering questions/explaining what the original sender observed. This would make a great platform for those emotions to really shine raw and unapologetically.

Final Thoughts: A painful and relatable piece of work. I think that makes for a great base. I think right now it's condensed and can be unpacked even further. I do think there's a lot of beauty, however; as a reader feeling as if the recipient voice is breaking through and overtaking. There's a strong overall sense of yearning in this piece. A feeling of wanting to be seen so badly. Although my main criticism is related to the voice of the author feeling lost or overshadowed at times, it's kinda poetic justice in a way. Thank you for the good read :)

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