Dawn Break

Perspectives change during beginnings.

As the morn breaks
With its shadows revealed,
Eyes will create anew
A vision that never was
And the blind shall cease
Their staring into a sun
That burnt out long before
It ever shone.

Author's Note

I'm not afraid of criticism so please, don't be shy.

Reviews

[Gamitsuki]

NiCe......i APPRECIATE IT......really a beautiful piece...... a piece of advice if yo don't mind.... maybe can be worked more little harder.....it would be fascinating........keep going....thnks for sharing!!!! Topic was good, words are awesome but the matter is that something is missing in the middle verses......maybe some more beautiful description..... anyways keep it up......go with this lucky charm.....!!!;-)

[Sleiman Azizi]

Thanks for that. I sense that there may be something a but lacking in the early to middle part too.

[Gamitsuki]

my great pleasure.........:-)

[Hitchhiker]

Very sorry I failed to write as coherently as you would like, thanks you for pointing out my bad.

[Sleiman Azizi]

Not sure what you are referring to here.

[Hitchhiker]

Sorry, that was meant for another person. I apologize.

[Gamitsuki]

really sorry, but can you explain what are you talking about please?

[Hitchhiker]

Pretty much contradictory poem with lines which are written with an infinite hand in order to make us step back and say . . . What the . . . Example . . . "Eyes will create anew / A vision that never was" These never was visions lie dormant, waiting for the right time to present themselves. Nice, concise poetry, Sleiman . . .

[Sleiman Azizi]

I'm interested in space so your comment 'with an infinite hand' was gratifying for me to read.

Thanks a lot.