Because Of You

more heartbreak poetry...

I said I wanted
to be with you
with whatever it is
that we might do.

You said you would
be  mine.
When you said that
you sounded so kind.

I really do like you,
possibly even love.
You like me too
at least I think.

That's why are
together, right?
no, change that are
to were.

We are no longer
we or us.
We are now
me and you.

I guess together
didn't last forever.
You left me
here to cry.

I understand
why you left,
but it still hurts,
no mater how you say it.

I have these pains
in my chest again
and I know it
is because of you.

Hopefully, the pain
will subside again
and love may come
back to me
for another visit...

Author's Note

well? please review!

Reviews

[Virtuosa X]

I love it.
This happens to so many of us so often. Especially us poets who have the gift to interpret those feelings of loss so beautifully with words.
I do hope loves comes back to you; not for a visit; but coming home to stay.
Good luck.

[hopelessromantic]

i love it

[Alex Vidmar]

Love it. Well done. Lots of wise words and well penned stanzas from someone so young.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I like it. I can relate I've been in that spot and.. yeah love found me again so don't give up! The poem was great. Wording was good and I didn't see any mistakes but I don't look for those anyway lol

[Sophie]

I read this and I mustn't cry one after the other and I have to say I like this one best. Also, I was reading it and i just thought "Because of You" might be a better title :) I really like this poem, one of my favorites of yours :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is really good Abbie! Your emotions were put into this poem very well, I can say so. I do have to say sadly, I can totally relate. I have been through the phase when someone leaves me and I'm hoping that we were still together. And after all of the time I was with that person they had promised that we would be together forever. I actually wrote a poem called "Together Forever Doesn't Exist" if you want to check it out to see how I feel about those two words (together forever) Ha. Again, this is great. Keep writing and keep up the good work :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Owlgirl]

Well written! Pure emotion fills the lines and consistent flow, thought you way want to look at the number of syllables in the second line of stanza two. This is truly an awesome poem. Beautiful.

[MandaBear]

wow.. amazing.. GREAT WRITE.