IS DADDY FIBBING?

A poem

IS DADDY FIBBING?

 

No flowers in my house

Ask me why..

No garden in my courtyard!!

 

No garden in my courtyard

Ask me why…

No space in my courtyard!!

 

No space in my courtyard

Ask me why

Daddy’s car is too big..

 

Daddy’s car is too big

Ask me why

Our family is so huge

 

Our family is so huge

Ask me why

Daddy loved mummy so much

 

Daddy loved mummy so much

Ask me why

He says she is his garden

 

He says she is her garden

I ask him… How?

 

Her eyes are like beetles

Her teeth are like jasmines

Her lips exudes honey.

Her smiles spread fragrance..

Her cheek is red as roseflower..

Her gazes are lusty as hibiscus..

Her breasts are tender as lotus..

Her words...., as mesmerizing as a flower

In the hands of a cupid!!!

 

Saying this dad laughed aloud

I too laughed… though

I couldn’t make out

Garden that mummy is..

Is Daddy fibbing?

 

 

 

Reviews

[alan peter kelly]

no...Daddy is telling the exactitude of truth...enjoyed the construction and perspective here...therepetition is interestingand in its entirety this poem gives me alot of positive and creative things of which to think :)

[Inci]

nice. poet's can compare anything and the thought of comparing mother to garden is nice..

[Undying Glory]

yeah, you sure wrote this from a great new perspective which makes this one really nice in my opinion. rest assured that such innocence is so refreshing in our very corrupted world. good write

[Randolf Ramos]

Childhood memories determines our thinking in the future, we are wired during our childhood on how to act, the gift of ideals and psychology playing every aspect in our soul. Be reminded that TABULARASA needs to be filled with happy memories.
Please check my poem TABULARASA.

[Richard Williams]

All the refreshing references to flowers, to life, framed from the perspective of a child, good job.

[the_stoic]

you must be quite light hearted to have come with something like this that's related to one's parents ... the imagery used by the father to describe his wife is really vivid . nice write

[Dream Weaver]

I really enjoyed this write Jeny I had to read it twice!
Nice work :)

[Adelia Alighieri]

I like the imagery, it glows throughout the piece. Well done.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

excellent metaphors and love the unique quality of the structure~ well done!~

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is so good. Such sweet words are wisdom of a wise man. Woman are the things your father's said in the poem. I like the total poem. You can tell a story in so few words. A outstanding poem. A very good ending. Thank you.
Coyote