A Call from Beyond

Grief.

The door of the laundry room was ajar

Vivid heartbeats were drumming in her ears

Crippled with anguish, she stared from afar

Unwilling to face one of her worst fears

"Mummy, I'm cold," a faint, distant voice said

She felt her stomach turn to burning ice

For her child had now been two long years dead 

Author's Note

This was assigned to me by a teacher at shcool as a writing exercice. The challenge is simple: 7th book in the shelf, 7th page, 7th sentence. Write a 7-lined poem with that sentence.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a very brief idea reminding me of an independent film I just saw. A woman got a babysitter to care for a child, but the babysitter never saw the child (warned to never open bedroom door). It turned out, the child didn't exist becuz it had died. But I saw this actress as I read your poem, & the strange ways our minds won't let go or accept reality, in situations of extreme pain. Your poem definitely does justice to this strange phenomenon.

[Moody]

The idea of the film is quite spooky, indeed! I always think the slightest involvement of children in horror stories make them twice as scary and unsettling haha
I really appreciate for your review Barley!

[Beccy]

This is very atmospheric Moody. "Mummy I'm cold," As a mother, those three simple words sent shivers down my spine.


Beccy.

[Moody]

Thank you Beccy!
Yes, the atmosphere is quite spooky and unsettling.

[Stan Lee]

Oooh... *shivers* that's one creepy poem! Excellent rhyming and flow Moody. Very enjoyable and entertaining read. Stay inspired! :)

[Moody]

Thank you so much for this. I'm very glad you enjoyed.

[Stan Lee]

Anytime. :) I'm looking forward to more!

[Carolynn]

This is really good, yes a bit spooky but I can imagine if a mother lost a child she would easily experience moments like that - so touching!

[Moody]

Thanks Carolynn :) I agree could reflect the tediousness of the grieving process.

[Untalented Creation]

I really wasnt expecting such a bitter thing. It's stunning.

[Moody]

Thank you.
I thought I'd try something spooky for once haha

[Woody]

hey that's a nice start, Moody, even if I say so myself.
may I suggest you move "long" one step back?
good creepy one.

[Moody]

Oh yeah, i'll fix that. thanks :)