Serene

My contest entry for Helena's Blue Rose Cafe

Love like sweet perfume

Splendid in it's libidinous presence

Turn this sultry heart to glass

That could be shattered in a breath

Two lips so serene

Purer 

Than a rain drenched sky

Beget

Oblivion of cares

In God's merciful union

Author's Note

This work is my entry for a contest in Helena's Blue Rose Cafe. I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[M.E.Lyle]

What a great expression of feeling. I loved the last line most, "Oblivious of cares In God's merciful union." Fantastic. Hope you do well in the contest.

[Helen Crutchett]

Scott this is one beautiful poem. You are correct in leaving it just as. You wrote it from the heart and not just for 'contest rules'. Our next contest coming up shortly.....glad to have you on board and hope you enjoy our Blue Rose group for many years to come!

Kind regards
Helena :)

[Scott S]

Hi Helena,
Thank you very much. I was sort of bummed that I did not use the words in the proper order....but it's hard to go back and change a piece, when you have it set in your mind the way it is. Thanks for accepting me into the Cafe......I am happy to be part of it. I look forward to the next contest. Take care, Helena.

[Marie]

This is very good...I too entered this contest, but used my words in the form of a story...I could never have done it with poetry as well as you have...

[Scott S]

Thank you very much, Marie. I sort of messed up, by not using the words in exact order.....have thought about re-doing it.....but may just take my lumps and leave it as is. I can always enter the next contest .....thanks again for your kind review, Marie.

[Marie]

Oh, I didn't realize you'r words weren't in the exact order proscribed. But it's still a good poem.

[Scott S]

Thanks a lot, Marie. I discovered my error after reading the instructions a second time. When in doubt....always read the directions....lol.