When Family Becomes Just a Word

First poem in awhile, so I'm a little rusty. Recently I had a nasty fight with my brother and things were said, lines were crossed.

Cringing at the hateful words
Strung together from ignorance
Temporary blanks of mind
That make the insults justified
Four simple letters
With power to shatter hope
Turn happiness to heartbreak
In the twitch of lips
The subconscious decision
To choose what stings most
The internal pride
That forces it out in spite
The blood in our veins
Calls for no special privileges
But instead warrants guilt
When damage has been done.

Author's Note

Review please

Reviews

[Aly]

Great job C. The title caught my attention

[C.C. Marx]

Thank you very much

[lee von cleef]

Rusty I think not, good. and Good you wear a little guilt, Crossing lines, had a poem with that name,Brothers are turds me I have three sisters, though my eldest has wiped the "Family" of me off her shoe.

[C.C. Marx]

Sometimes we say the one thing we know will hurt most because we can and out of spite, but if there's no guilt, there no hope in ever rekindling is there? Thanks for the review

[s y e]

Awwww, Hun, I'm sure everything will be okay. Remember I'm only a pm away for a vent. This was good, a lot of raw emotions in here.

~ Noodle.

[C.C. Marx]

Thanks noodles we are tying to work it out but I mean things take time thanks for the review

[s y e]

Yes they do, just know that I'm here and whatever happened will clear up soon,

[Sami Khalil]

I hope things will work out ...A good write...:)

[C.C. Marx]

As do I, thanks for the review

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[Chris]

some things you can forgive but most words you never forget.

Emotionally charged but...feels disjointed, as if in a shuffled sequence - to me. Too intentionally vague I think, possibly done to draw upon reader empathy?

[C.C. Marx]

I didn't totally want to relive the experience, something's are better tried to be forgotten but thank you for the feedback none the less

[Chris]

THAT explains the sense of vagueness I had. It hurts, but it really would be more emotionally powerful (and possibly give you some closure) if were more ...touchable.

[C.C. Marx]

I understand that and will take that into consideration if my lazy self ever chooses to revise this

[SyberRose]

Hopefully, you and your brother will be able to patch things up...it takes time...blood is thicker than water...I'm closer with my sister then my brother but I have one brother and one sister who passed away...Nicely penned..Rose

[C.C. Marx]

Sorry for your loss but I do hope things get better between us, things have been strained lately. Thank you for reviewing

[N!LoC]

i dont fight with my brother anymore... because... i stopped talking to him period... and my life has been better ever since :-)

[C.C. Marx]

I wish it were that simple but sometimes you have to stick it out, I still care about him, probably more than he does for me. Thanks for reviewing!!