Hope

Even when it feels like you're not breathing

You can always trust the hope

Life can be worth living

When there seems to be no way to cope

 

It comes to you everday

In the springtime

In the rain

 

When a new time begins you're loyalties will lay

In a new begining,

Your heart will be at bay.

Author's Note

Honestly I made this up in a whim. I kinda like it. But I know I can do better. I will try ^-^ please continue to read. Enjoy

Reviews

[Sofia N]

They say that the best writing are the ones that come in a whim. :) I love this poem, every word in it is well written. This poem is the perfect poem to read to someone when they need a little bit of hope.

Great Job..;)

[Wicahpi]

Very Sweet!!

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Ms. Person (For Lack Of A Name),

It is a honor to review your writings. Thank you for sharing with it. I do agree with you in that you can do better. This is a good poem though, with a nice flow. Some of the rhymes seem forced, like with "When there seems to be no way to cope" could just be " when there is no way to cope." A matter of opinion probably, but you do keep a steady flow. The subject is also one that all need to learn as we can always have it more worse. Honestly, I think life gets a little better all of the time just in different parts of your life where others may come crashing down. "Even when it feels like you're not breathing, you can always trust the hope." That is a good line. Aaaannyywwaayyssss, thank you for sharing with us. It could have been better but it's a good topic with a good flow to it. Remember always this that poetry is a collaboration of heart and mind (or soul, whatever you prefer.) Kudos. 8.9/10.

Sincerely,
S. W. Scaggs

[Lucia]

Aren't the "written on a whim" the cutest ones eva! I really enjoyed reading this, and the theme of hope was kinda inspiring. I actually feel like writing now ^_^
Great job, luv the rhyme scheme!

[Lunar Lightning]

Why is it that your writing lately ends in hope and the promise of sunshine? It's confusing because you don't have any hope left, at least that's the impression I've gotten lately. Not bad though, it's smile-inducing.

Luna

[Krazy On The Outside]

I really like this!
Great job! =)

[only hope]

hey, i really like this piece of work, i think i could like your whims :) keep writing like this and you wont go wrong :) looking forward to reading more from you