just 7 lines mama just for you

Mama this is all I wanna say

Just seven lines mama just for you,
You are a fairy i always knew,
Thank you mama for curing my flu,
I lost it, you got it...whew!
Forgive me mama I speak too much,
But you do too, Dad will vouch,
You are an Angel, Dad's a grouch!

 

Author's Note

I can be a good son mama

Reviews

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Thank you very much sonceotrok. Thank you for taking the time to write your lovely poem tailored to suit our contest. But could you please try to edit it by adding your own art work....any simple sketch or drawing that you can make yourself to suit your words and add it above the first line to your poem.Please await the seven day contest results. All the best!

[Phillitup]

:)

absolutely stunning and eloquent

[sonceotrok]

Thankye Dell!

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Here you have displayed a sons true devotion to his mother with these 7 lines of yours and the bold green statement in the illustration over black ink.
Though you have tried to be comical you still are pretty serious when you have made references to your dad:)
You are a shrewd political person you know you are sonceotrok and the way you have played mom against dad harmlessly but effectively pretending to take either side at various times its a rare feat.
At the same time you have very subtly retorted to moms reprimanding you with "you do too...dad will grouch".
Mam cured your flu by taking it on herself...now that's hilarious but so true in real life! The last line in minute font was the comic climax and made me laugh out!
Congrats Sonceotrok for a humorous and apt work written in good cheer!

[sonceotrok]

ok fine!