no name

gentle whispers all around

flowing softly without a sound

softest touch upon your skin

invisible hands come again

whipping crisply pushing more

setting place for all the lore

something old and still new

everywhere yet still few

tender relief from blistering heat

raging life running still

ever free from sights grasp

my lasting dream, endless task

catch me friend, come and play

my hearts desire will never stay

calmest heart, blasting fury

my free soul never bury

laughing clapping

everlasting

come and go

you'll never know

all will chase

put me in a vase

and i'll be still

bent to your will

can't get me to stay

not tomorrow or today

freedom calls

not a thing still stalls

stalling the rain

pushing the fire

here i go moving again

follow me all desire

bring you joy

bring you pain

bring your heart love again

take away one again

Reviews

[quinfinn]

i like the cadence of this piece, it seems to sing itself to the reader...effortlessly and with graceful ease. nicely worded and cleverly penned, well done.

[marie]

Thank you so much Quin!:) I'm glad you like it!!:)

[RachelReaper]

The way this poem flowed, it reminded me of a feather floating to the ground with each line. I enjoyed reading this, and it almost put me in a dream-like state, however, there is also truth in your words and there were raw emotions, too.

[marie]

The peaceful intensity in this really reflects my mood at the moment this was penned, I'm glad you liked it:) thank you for your kind review:)

[RachelReaper]

ur welcome :D

[marie]

:)

[stavangerfisherman]

Hi Marie
An excellent piece. Dont think chase and vase go together except visually. Maybe "put me in my place" instead?
follow me all desire could be follow my desire?
bring your heart love again could be bring your hearts love back again?
Easier to criticize than do
you impress me
regards
terry

[marie]

thanks for the advice, however, those lines i don't believe go along with the point in this piece

[Ethale Captor]

An ambiguous poem, nice work. I like the rhyme scheme.

[marie]

thank you:) i am so glad you liked it:)

[Ethale Captor]

It is another of your great works. There are not many, if any at all, of your writings I do not like.

[marie]

Really????:)

[Ethale Captor]

Truly.

[marie]

:D

[s y e]

Wow, this was amazing! I loved it.

[marie]

thank you:) i am so glad you did:)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I think this is a sublime piece. It has a natural flow and soft intensity. I like some of the imagery as well. With that said, there are a few places where you lost the rhyme scheme, I couldn't actually figure out format you were using. Some poets do get complicated in their rhyming, but when you start off with AABB in the first two stanzas and then switch to ABCC in the third stanza it sort of throws things off a bit for me. Overall, though, I think a little edit and this one could be quite nice.

[marie]

thank you for the advice:) i'm glad you liked it:) thanks for the review:)

[PurpleQuartz]

Amazing poem!

[marie]

Thank you!!:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"take away one again"

ooo i like that...and really like the "vase" stanza...

good poem...

nicely lyrical and imageful..

jacob

[marie]

Thank you or the review I'm glad you like it:)

[Holly Mason]

and i'll be still
bent to your will
the words for me read so quick with a touch of sun in them
like a good read just fulfilling
thank you for sharing

[marie]

Thank you so much I tried to bring elements from my God and the wind in this so I'm glad it came together in a pleasing way:) thank you fr te review:)

[Sir Joseph]

What an amazing relaxing piece! Your skills baffle me daily!:)

[marie]

As yours baffle me:) I'm so glad you liked it sweety:)

[Sir Joseph]

What's not to like?:)

[marie]

Meh the third stanza I'm a bit iffy on

[Sir Joseph]

Well thats you not meh ;)

[marie]

It's bad..

[Sir Joseph]

i personally loved it :)

[marie]

Aww:*

[Sir Joseph]

:) :*