jabirs revenge part 6

sorry it took so long... yeah i'm not gonna make excuses, i was being lazy... or preoccupied

May 2.

she is still hurting them…why do you have me wait? please, God please. this is yours, but i don't know how much longer i can hold on. i want to see Jabir again…please accept me into your home….please…..

May 4.

i don't even know what to say now!! i'm without that weak little whelp who always kept sniffling that it was wrong, that i should leave…but no…i am here to stay!! i know best here!!! i have won!! these people i have taken sit and cry around me, its so refreshing, no longer do they mock me no longer do they stand idly by and watch as i fall…now instead they fall…why does this not carry my joy as it once did… this was and is my life….perhaps i just need to give it time…

May 7.

i sit and listen….her silence is deafening…… where is she???? WHERE IS SHE?!?!?!

May 10.

i found one that was once her friend… she has to speak now… she is not gone, she can't be…no she is…i chased her away just as i did Jabir… they will not stop me!! i will keep this ones heart she is mine just like all the others!!

May 14.

another gone without leaving me the peace…perhaps i should try another way… i won't keep them anymore….. look!! my hand shakes and my vision again is red…perhaps this is a sign? time to find another playmate…

May 18.

i am tiring of this caution, it has gotten me nowhere!! my laugh has caught in my throat, and my every move is held with a contained excitement, i do not wish to contain it!! soon…i will release it soon… i simply need a little time…

May 22.

it is time.

May 26.

they are coming…. i have to run…something of her lingers begging me not to!! silence little girl you cannot win this!!

May 28.

why? WHY?! this isn't right.. this isn't fair!! i want my peace!! i want my joy!! why must they chase me so?? it keeps me from my play… this is her fault.. to think i missed her!! she is the cause of this she has to be!!!

Reviews

[s y e]

Wow, this is very gripping! You have me hooked and begging BUT waiting patiently for more ;-) I'm not patient, ask Frieda or anyone! They'll tell you ;-P

Anyhoo, very captivating and I loved it, cannot wait for more! Excellent Marie

[marie]

I'm so glad you like this!!:) and well I am hoping to have another update in by the end of the month:) can ya hold out till then??:) so glad it has caught your attention it is an honor!:)

[s y e]

Yip, I can do that ;-P

[marie]

yay:) hope you like the next piece as well as the last ones:)

[Nick.B]

Uuuu, another part, I was really wondering, again a good chapter with some twisted sides to it, love the darkness...

[marie]

Thank you!:) glad you like it:) and I want to thank you for your devotion to this piece and following it from it's start!!:) hoping to have the next chapter in by the end of the month:)

[Nick.B]

:D

[marie]

:)

[Amaya Sullivan]

Just reading this story is captivating. I really have no idea what is going on, but just reading this has me wondering.

It is very nicely written. It appears to be a of a diary or journal format which is very interesting. Great job!

[marie]

have you read the rest of it? it would probably make it much more clear:)

[Amaya Sullivan]

Yea, I just added to my library to read it.

[marie]

yay:) i am honored:) thank you:)

[quinfinn]

interesting little write, because i have not been keeping up with the previous chapters , i obviously don't know what is going on, but the writing style is engaging and well planned out , so it is a fluid read. well done , marie!

[marie]

if you like you can read through the earlier parts, must say that i'm glad you liked it:) takes alot of planning and careful wording...think i rewrote this one five times, than left it for....around three weeks before uploading it...

[quinfinn]

story telling is never easy....especially if you are going chapter by chapter. i will try to remember to go back to those when i can get through my r/r list...if i forget you can always remind me, one chapter at a time....please.

[marie]

lol:) ok:) will do looking forward to your thoughts on the story:)

[Sir Joseph]

There are so many emotions shown in this write. The deliverance of what you are trying to get across is wonderful. Bravo :)

[marie]

thank you:) i'm so glad you like it:) is there anything you see that i could improve upon? aside form capitalization and punctuation, this time i actually did it on purpose, not out of sheer laziness...:)lol

[Sir Joseph]

Hmm at the moment no because i meh tummy is making a fuss about food lol :) i will re read it several times and tell ya tonight:)

[marie]

ok:) thanks you much!!:) and go eat!! i will leave school and shove it down your throat!!:) lol

[Sir Joseph]

Im in the process of making this future transaction of nutrients a definite merger :) lol went businessy lol

[marie]

get it done your on the clock!!:)lol

[Sir Joseph]

tick tock........... The clock got shot. lol

[marie]

80 poor clock!!

[Sir Joseph]

It owed meh monay!!

[marie]

so you shoot it?? should have tortured it till it gave it all to you >:)lol

[Sir Joseph]

Nah.. He had already given it to the grandfather clock lol

[marie]

then go get it!!:)

[Sir Joseph]

Its in cancun!! haha i never told you that story lol

[marie]

no...no you didn't....may i say... WHAT THE HECK ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT?!

[Sir Joseph]

I will tonight lol

[marie]

You never did:)lol