Spider Lily

A spider lily bows its head,

as if to hush a whispered dread.
Its petals drip with gentle rain,
like tears that fall from skies of pain.

The creaking gate swings on its own,
and whispers names long left unknown.
A crow calls out across the field,
yet silence is the only yield.

The lily shivers in the breeze,
as if it shares my memories.
Its fragile fingers, stained with red,
reach out to touch what’s left unsaid.

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

To give poetic justice to the spider lily, with such lament as "fragile fingers", utters such an eloquence to nature that we so often overlook. You couldn't have written it any more beautiful than it is!

[poetic swan]

Thank you so much, your words mean a lot. I just tried to capture the quiet sorrow I felt in the lily, I’m glad it spoke to you.

[CD Campbell]

Nice form. Tight stanzas. I get a sense that all is gothic and dark in your poem. Probably a massive understatement, but I really like how you weave everything together well. Good work!

[poetic swan]

thanksss i always try my best

[Betty Hermelee]

the Spider Lilly reminds you of pain, sad memories…… “It’s petals drip with gentle rain like tears that fall from skies of pain”…… the silence of death pervades…unsaid memories haunt this scene that is so beautifully written…
Warmly
B🌷🌷🌷🌷🌷

[poetic swan]

thank you so much for reading my poem and giving me such a beautiful review.

[Betty Hermelee]

You are very welcome!!!
Warmly, B

[Kady R.]

Hiii Poetic Swann!!!

Something about connection with nature. How it can make us feel less alone when no one is around.

This poem touched me because I feel its true "the lily shivers in the breeze, as if it shares my memories." Well said

Thanks for sharing.
--Kady

[poetic swan]

i feel glad that you like it

[Kady R.]

🤗🤗🤗🥰🥰🥰

[Pallavi]

Beautiful!
The last line "it's fragile fingers, stained with red, reach out to touch what's left unsaid" is deep!

[poetic swan]

thank you so much