The Garden Was a Lie

I wandered through that faded garden,

Where blossoms hid their thorns from view.
What once was bright now lies forgotten�"
A place I thought I knew.

I took the long way through the woods tonight,
Avoided roads we used to share.
The wind was sharp, the stars half-bright�"
Yet something pulled me back to where.

Your name hung low within the mist,
Unspoken, yet it found me still.
It clung like something half-dismissed,
A shadow I could never will.

They ask, “What harm is loving true?”
I only nod and turn aside.
Some fires burn a colder hue,
And flicker where the secrets hide.

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

A lovely melancholic piece where it seems like your memory has turned into shadows and mist, at time forgotten..then flashes thereof...."your name hung low within the mist"....Shows me that love is fading...perhaps in secret... I love the flow and the rhyme.. NICE!
Warmly, B

[poetic swan]

thanks for your beautiful review, your words feels like a warm hug

[Betty Hermelee]

Always a pleasure to review!
Warmly, B

[Chris Shaw]

Some loves create such a deep sense of loss in their wake. I felt that acutely in your stanzas. When something so precious turns out to be a lie, how devastating that can be. Finely penned work.

Chris

[poetic swan]

thanks your review give me motivation to write more

[Arundass TP]

Excellent poem. Enjoyed reading

[poetic swan]

i am grateful that you like it

[Neha agrawal]

Your poem feels like walking through an abandoned memory. The beauty is still there, but softened by distance and touched with quiet sorrow. It’s wistful, intimate, and leaves a gentle chill in its wake.

[poetic swan]

i am happy that you like it , thanks for your amazing words

[John the Baptist]

This one captures well the feelings of one half of a failed love affair. It must have been a deep relationship, judging by the sense of loss the poem conveys. A very well rhymed and moving piece here.

[poetic swan]

thanks for your support and have a good day

[Beccy]

Ah yes, the consequence of love, unrequieted or otherwise, is writ large in this beautifully crafted poem; the last verse, and in particular those last two lines are a poetic tour de force.

Beccy.

[poetic swan]

thanks for your amazing words

[Ayesha Faiz]

Your poem has a gentle, sad feeling and paints clear pictures in the reader’s mind. The way you describe nature and emotions together makes it feel.... deep and touching, and the ending leaves a strong, thoughtful impression.
A lovely piece.

[poetic swan]

thank you so much , your words means a lot to me

[Soren]

A haunting poem that seems to lie in the shadows of thought. It holds a secret that flickers through its words as does the flame. The flow is smooth and one finds oneself sliding down its verses drawn by the gravity of its pull. Very nice

[poetic swan]

thank you so much, you are such a beautiful person.

[Soren]

You are most welcome and too kind