Treacherous Sands

Drowning in the hunger of acclaimation

The glittering sands of ovation,
Beckoned me to move to the temptation.
Stepping my feet into it
I let the enthusiastic cheers envelope me.

Slowly my feet sink into it;
As the realisation hit.
The traitorous wind jeering,
The gloomy seagulls crying.
I Drown lower and lower into
The treacherous sands....

Engulfing in my own fallacy;
I try to break away from fantasy.
But in the thoughtless pursuit;
Of acclaimation...
I have deprived myself of;
My own recognition..

Amending myself ,to impress ....
I've abandoned to express.....

Author's Note

A thought newly penned.. I guess you will like it and try to express your thoughts freely...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful thoughts in the poetry.
"Engulfing in my own fallacy;
I try to break away from fantasy.
But in the thoughtless pursuit;
Of acclaimation...
I have deprived myself of;
My own recognition.. "
Easy to lose self. I like the feel of struggle and trying to hold on. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tom]

Yes be true to yourself and resist bowing to peer pressure or false values, just so you can run with the ' in crowd ' !

A cerebral piece of sage poetry, nicely expressed !

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you for your kind review Tom.. :)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Very deep and mysterious. This piece is very unique and has a distinctive style. I like the title!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Squink.. :) i do appreciate your review.

[Sami Khalil]

We must respect, love or appreciate ourselves before expecting others to do that and we must earn them...An excellent poem and concept...:)...................

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yea.. i absolutely agree with you. Thank you Sami. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..............

[anne]

A very new thought that I have not read yet and really its beautifully written..........

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you anne for your beautiful words :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮We must hold true to who we are lest we sink into something we are not. Great work.╰☆╮

[Sophy Freebirds]

Well said Brittany... :) thank you

[J. Land]

Very nicely written poem. I love the overall message of staying true to yourself. My philosophy has always been to write what comes out. Sometimes it's good, sometimes not. The audience really plays the biggest role in this idea, though. What is sent is not always what is received. For me one cannot write for everyone,nor can one write solely for herself. What remains is simply to write, to ponder it, to be as eloquent and moving as possible. Once that is done, it is out of your hands.

I have thoroughly enjoyed your work, Sophy. Thank you for sharing it.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yes i agree with you. Writing should be spontaneous.. :) thank you for your insightful review..

[Harmartia Poe]

I often times have the worry of sinking into someone I'm not. Much line a shoreline, something so beautiful can mask something terrifying and treacherous. Nicely done :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thank you Hamantha.. :) yeah you nailed it on the head..

[Harmartia Poe]

Did you just combine my two names because that is beautiful xD

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yea samantha + harmartia gives Hamantha.. ;) my version of your name.. glad you liked it.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yea samantha + harmartia gives Hamantha.. ;) my version of your name.. glad you liked it.

[Frieda P]

Whenever we're not true to ourselves, we don't shine authentically, sometimes we get caught up in the spotlight and forget who we truly are. Well said Sophy!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Thanks Freida :) glad you grabbed the message

[Frieda P]

You're lucky I had two cuppas ;) Was my pleasure Sophy.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Ha... yea. ;) lucky me. Anyways thank you