Life

Life's a breath,

an existing I am

thoughtless as death

air's reservoir trapped in a dam

An effortless floating cloud

gift from a distant star

dust's vibrations ploughed

circle near to far

Dancing death plays tag

without fuel of thought

sans white flag

What it is, you got

Reviews

[Amy R]

What a powerful poem.

"An effortless floating cloud//
gift from a distant star"

These lines hold so much depth, wow!
nice write!
-Amy

[Soren]

Thank you so much Amy for your read and such kind words of encouragement they are deeply appreciated.

[Amy R]

You're welcome Soren! My pleasure.

[Ken Simm.]

Existential and clever. This I like a lot.

[Soren]

Thanks Ken I appreciate your read and most kind words.

[Thomas W Case]

Superb work. I feel this one deeply.

[Soren]

Thank you so much Thomas for the review and kind words