Myths

A melted dream runs down my eyes

in drips of a scented past

An echo of memory's velvet lies

painted a stain on shadows cast

A trembling of ripples shakes my skin

A breeze from the mind dries dark skies

Flush fresh sewage into a black pond of sin

wearing a bruised smile's disguise

Walking on Egyptian water

whispering willow through willow

A lamb to the slaughter

in a reed basket with a pillow

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

The imagery is quite vivid and the last few lines tell of the Storting being told. Creative and well done

[Soren]

Thanks so much for the review and interpretation it is most appreciated Poetic

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. I loved the details of the reed basket.

[emmajoygreen]

Cleverly laid poetry and history, the connect of your words and the final stanza works so well. You have a very clear and imaginative mind, Kudos and more, Soren.

[Soren]

Thank you so much emmajoy. Your reviews are always so welcome.

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. Great imagery. I could see the scene.

[Soren]

Thanks so much Thomas

[John the Baptist]

The last verse reminded me of the story of the infant Moses. Was not able to link it to the preceding verses, though.

[Soren]

Just as prior to Christ there was Mithra, who was of a virgin birth, died for the sins of all and was resurrected of the third day, so prior to Moses there was the myth of Osiris the Egyptian god who the head of the gods wanted to kill so he was hid in a reed basket in the river Nile until discovered by Isis who took him in as her own. It seems all myths have some prior link.

[JD Major]

a dream of despair, helplessness,
and the fragile birth of hope.
A great Reed! :)
JD

[Soren]

Thanks JD for the read and insightful interpretation.

[Ken Simm.]

Moses as I have never heard him projected before. Excellent multi layered work.

[Soren]

Thanks for the read Ken it is most appreciated. It is amazing how similar some myths are.

[DIVYA]

This poem has some very fascinating imagery. The Egyptian waters and the reed basket took me to a biblical time. The events seem to be leading up to something unfortunate. Tying it to the first two verses that were also profound in imagery, a scented dream dripping down the eyes, velvet memories casting a stain on shadows and the dark sewage of sin, all point to loss of hope, darkness and disillusionment.
I loved this read because it had some very unique visuals to offer and offered many angles to ponder about.

[Soren]

Thank you Divya for your most insightful review and comments. You are so right about the biblical reference. It does go a bit farther though. If you know Egyptian mythology of Osiris there is a striking similarity to the reed basket of Moses the infant. The lamb also has parallels in mythology. Thanks so much again.