Points of light

Aging moth holes in a black canopy 

beam light from far beyond

A cloud, veil of vanity

moon reflects on mirror's pond

Songs of primitive memory

played on cricket's legs

The tune of a loon in night's ebony

emerge from phoenix eggs

Star's drizzled beams

leak wisdom from above

in drips that form pools of dreams

bleeding streams of distant love

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

fantastic use of mythology and imagery here again. the scenery you paint here is mostly silent, but the sounds of the crickets add another textural layer. when the crickets chirp the silence of the countryside becomes more obvious.
thematically this is ambitious. wisdom is the only form of happiness that lasts and representing it as the light of a phoenix is spot on. knowledge is a form of immortality; it is the thing we all seek deep down. exploring that in just three stanzas with ABAB rhyming scheme is quite a challenge but i think you have done it.

[Soren]

Ern your words are inspiring and most generous. I thank you warmly for your encouragement. It means a great deal. I am awaiting your next writing with great anticipation

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Why is love so distant for most...even if it is as far as the stars, why can't we reach up and grab it.
Really like the personification which makes this poem come to life.
j.

[Soren]

I love your question Jacob. It caused me a great deal of reflection. To me it is a paradox that its distance is directly disproportional to its closeness It begins within. To love another we must love ourself first. Those that can't touch their inner self can't reach the stars, Thanks for the read Jacob

[Marie]

A very descriptive metaphorical gem! I love how you describe the moon hidden behind a cloud still reflects on the surface of the pond. The crickets play in the darkest part of night as baby phoenix's are born as eggs to live and rise again from the ashes of their past. Stellar wisdom leaks and drips wisdom in dreams which bleed into the past and distant love. Wow! Amazing write, Soren! Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading...

[Soren]

Thank you so much Marie your words of interpretation are so perceptive and your thought processes are deep and profound. I love where you took this.

[Marie]

Most welcome, Soren...

[Amy R]

Your poem explores themes of existence, love, and the wisdom gleaned from both the natural world and personal experiences. Very nicely written, I love the last stanza...
Lovely metaphor used .."moon" as a mirror suggests reflection and introspection, while "phoenix eggs" symbolize rebirth or new beginnings.
-Amy

[Soren]

You are so right and it is gratifying that it came through to you. Thank you for your read and comment it is most appreciated

[Amy R]

You're welcome, keep good.