Hole

 I came to the edge of love, in a hole drunken did fall

A wall, up which I can not crawl

Rock echoes talk, on tablets of clay 

Chalk words of scrawl dissolved in light of day

Stone trap without a map

Daylight stars their story tell 

Solo climb heart’s peak and gap

In a nap of time at the bottom of a well 

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

you have somehow turned heartbreak into a gritty adventure story. that is quite extraordinary. instead of the persona's emotions, we get muscular action and a dirty setting. while he is not to be envied, there is something heroic about him. a simple mistake lands him at the bottom of a well, but survival instincts kick in and he seems determined to climb out. there's an exciting drama playing out.

[Soren]

Thank you so much Ern for the read and most interesting interpretation it is most helpful and appreciated

[Betty Hermelee]

I might say dear Soren that you were drunk with love, or in love.....and thought the cosmos was enlightening, since they might have been in some way, you sill couldn't overcome the well, so you took a nap of dreams of smiles, feeling light and easy ,carefree, and hopeful...at some point you will awaken into the arms of your beloved....
Warmly, B

[Soren]

Thank you Betty for your kind interpretation of this piece. Ah but if life were that easy my friend. Your words are most appreciated

[Betty Hermelee]

life is not easy….we must make the best of it….some darkness, some enlightenment, that’s the way it goes!
always a pleasure🌷🌷🌷🌷
Warmly, B