Sand in a bottle

With a thief's hands that can not grasp

We cherish what we can not keep

And beg for what we can not buy

No smile or frown, face with no shame

Crawling in circles twice a day

No one can stop it from running

Reviews

[Sky]

That's a hurtful thing that we can't stop time from running with its pace. We can't hold onto something we wanna hold on to. Time is merciless, never ever stops for anyone but we human don't value time always spend time to insult others, always trying to find faults in others even though we lack so much in ourselves don't you agree soren?

[Soren]

Thank you so much for the read of this piece and its interpretation. Indeed much of what we call time is misspent.

[Davidgeo]

The hunting... no human can fully suppress this impulse. It comes out as manipulation otherwise. I like the sand reference. Existence in general is like sand to me... the more you squeeze your handful of sand the faster it passes through your fingers. What's left is something unpleasant. I think this means we should not force our surroundings. Even when it comes to our base impulses... if we suppress them blindly they will reemerge in unpleaseant ways. I over analyze everything so feel free to tell me I'm off my rocker and totally wrong about this. I won't mind.

[Soren]

I am intrigued with your interpretation of this piece. I truly believe that there is no wrong interpretation in that the meaning of poetry is very personal and its value is what one personally draws from it not what the author intended. What I had in mind as a theme when writing each stanza was time. Thank you so much for your read and interpretation

[JessyJacob]

Hi Betty
If you could unblock me I want to write review for your poem

So I am writing here
I saw that soldier couldn't recognise her lady, the lady would take care of yourself as she was there from where to where... I don't think that lady forgot though soldier forgot her ..
I really love your poems betty...

[John the Baptist]

On the other hand, the time is always now.

[Soren]

Thank you John for your read and remark and you are so right it is always now with time running on a treadmill.

[Thomas W Case]

Superb work. Time slips away.

[Soren]

Thank you so much for the read and kind words

[JessyJacob]

To answer Emma, you have to see life of people and their life travel is what Time. You should see people are born and count their life as time line.
Only Shiva god has power to annihilatiin.
Life goes when the person who has born finished his talk or cannot live anymore and killed by someone or suicide.

But I see my grandmother though at 84yrs still she is waiting for her call from God never frustrated with her weak body and still carrying her old body. I thought we should survive not give up. But few situations people snatch their life too from others....
They know they are going to lose luxury in life so at the back of others why they need someone when hav everything why london dreams to a meditator living as middle class family...
I feel when I see my responsibility is done itstime to leave...

[JessyJacob]

Hi
Time is like your life time. Why you hav taken birth and why did at certain time. I all these are decided by God to make your soul worth to do something better. But few people never utilise there time and enjoy pleasure drink writing smoke. But few people made use of time made career wedding kid and take care of family. Here based on this karma we get better life again once we reborn. If you ask me our soul travels how long, I think what I know is life travels till it needs no desire to live again. We take births until we kill our desire and culminating into God. Once into God, as a God reborns for a purpose....
So you dig yourself you are having desire to born again as human or animal and if you don't have desire and knowledge your purpose then definitely you make use of time. Few people think this might be life we just enjoy more than our capacity and take from others to live more, do you think God is dumb ignoring what you do definitely I see people suffer if not in limits ...

People desire more and that desire only kill them ...in achieving this desire people crush others life and definitely God will punish them...

People plan so much sitting and eating.
One lady a man promised her he will marry made her divorce and leave her son, then dragged so long to make her lose ability to giv birth too, but latest technology we have ivf and UV and saving eggs, poor she and she facing you want to have sex with me .. that lady is trying not to keep one servant when he gets old .

I see mom what is she drinking hot coffee or cold one that nurse not even checking properly and I asked her make it warm it looks hot but mom just drank without saying a word ..mom was shocked that I care that much.

People are dying to meet and see and talk he is just not even cared what is going on keep on writing whatever he wants ...

God don't make people this innocent where he doesn't know who is loving and know much about him...
I am not girl of fighting type but I solve my life puzzles by myself without asking any help..



Jessy Jacob

[Soren]

Thank you so much for your read and comment it is appreciated

[emmajoygreen]

Time truly is UNIQUE ! How would one describe it to an alien - tis something that takes place ever second of an intake of breath, can be seen moving on a watch or clock..and, all the time understanding or doing this and that. Tis happening.. somewhere, everywhere at different moments, it can't be seen but absolutely exists .. but.. .. but.. ..? Magic or otherwise? Not manmade but how was it made? Did it just happen, arrived by chance or intention? Why the need for it, would Man exist without it?

As you very rightly say , 'No one can stop it from running'

I ask, Where does time come from? Is it an essential or mere thing? Where does it go when used - to you or me or.. ? Is it fact or fiction? Why?

Thank you for making me think, imagine and - for a while yet. :)

[Soren]

Thank you Emmajoy for you kind and supportive words

[Neha agrawal]

You are talking about time here. Maybe yes, time is a real thief once stolen can't bring back, once gone can't reverse.

[Soren]

Yes indeed that is the theme of the poem. Thank you so much for the read Neha. I appreciate your read of this piece and your words of understanding

[Chris Shaw]

Time my friend. How it runs though our fingers at speed and that hour glass magnifies with age. That ticking clock ever present. Finely crafted poem Soren. Happy Sunday.

Chris

[Soren]

Thank you so much Chris for the read and yes indeed time is all these things. I appreciate your words of support