Awaakening

Today I awoke from a fantasy broke

Its shimmer and gleams gone with the dreams

A new world's crust of tarnish and rust

As I realize sleep's lies have turned to dust

Reviews

[RomaJ]

Soren, I love how you capture that sharp moment when dreams fade and the world feels cold and quiet. There’s a haunting beauty in the way sleep’s shimmer turns to dust..I felt it in every line.
Roma

[Soren]

Thank you so much Roma your words of encouragement are deeply valued and your kind words of support are most appreciated

[Chris Shaw]

This little poem conveys so well the impact of dreams being shattered. Real life or even following sleep, the kick feels the same. Powerful poem Soren.

Chris

[Soren]

Thank you so much Chris for your read and kind understanding words they are always most helpful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sometimes I wish we could just sleep through our lives. Our dreams are more often than not...much better than our real lives.
j.

[Soren]

Thank you Jacob yes sometimes I feel that I am dreaming and maybe we do sleep through our lives thinking we are awake. I appreciate your read and take my friend.

[Thomas W Case]

Brilliant imagery. Powerful work.

[Soren]

Thank you so much Thomas I appreciate your review

[Jansy]

Soren, this hits like a cosmic slap. The way dreams shimmer then crumble to dust makes me feel both nostalgic and slightly betrayed by my own imagination. Beautifully sharp....waking up has never sounded so bitterly poetic.
- James

[Soren]

Thank you so much Jansy your words are most appreciated. I am never quite sure if I'm awake or dreaming and some nightmares are more vivid when my eyes are open.