Letter from her Captor

This is a fail of a narrative poem I wrote for english although everyone whos read it says its good.Anyways this poem was a letter from a murderer to the family of someone h e killed.

The tale that I tell, is full of deathly fears
What once was will not, remain unknown
I am positive that, this will leave you in tears
If you cant handle the truth, now you'll forever bemoan

It all started on, the night of halloween
I endlessly chased her, not getting very near
You should be scared, of what remains unseen
Cause you will never see again, the one you hold dear

 

Once I pick my prey, theres no turning back
Im like an angry wolf, the leader of the pack

I held my fang-like knife, right up to her head  

Sooner or later, she'll be ghostly white dead

 

The back of my truck, is where she will go

All she will feel, is alarm and woe

For souless am I, with an appetite for grief

I will soon crush your hope, beyond belief

 

Don't bother waiting for a ransom call

Thanks for reading, your a doll

Just so you know, this is no mercy killing

I hope your halloween, was really thrilling

Author's Note

Im a beginner.....please comment. And im pretty sure I should have put this in a different genre...tell me if im right.

Reviews

[little_secret101]

this is really good i like it alot lol

[Rediscovery]

This was different than what I've read before. I like how you put it into the captor's point of view (even though it's dark). And also the rhyming, I'm always a fan of rhyming in poems! Great job on your first poem!

[Jazique]

That was nice. Very entertaining. I loved the similes and stuff. You really had a rhyme thing going on some of the verses. well done for goose bumps are near.