The Dove & The Eagle

When the past knocks on your door..........

I wanted to feel like I was on top of a mountain

What’s the deal with couples who watch the sun at dawn

Unanswered questions flowed in my mind like a fountain

Never knew to you I was going to be drawn

 

I was a simple guy, neither poor nor rich

But your heart I possessed like gold

I remember the day we went to the beach

We wrote onto the sand “till we die old”

 

Like a burglar you crept in my heart with a musk

You said it was lust, but I believe you were just selfish

How could you cheat on a soul, tender like dusk?

Never felt that unwanted like a hip of trash

 

The love we had ate my heart away like rust

Hurting someone like that was pure evil & cold

I accepted the defeat ,to the eagle I was just dust

I felt pity on myself like a lonely man who is old

 

A few months later along come my soulmate

I vowed not to love but she gave my heart deliverance

Her heart I walked in freely as it was wide ajar like a gate

I totally forgot how it felt like to have a heartache

 

She was the treasure every men would want to keep

So tender, soft & innocent like a dove

She loved me the way I never know was that deep

Deep down I know it was true love

 

One summer the eagle called & said she was hurt

As I gently let her down, she offered to be the side chick

That night I had all sorts of thoughts about my lost past

I thought about my dove & I know the choice I had to pick

 

The very night I decided to cheat…..

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The ending was a surprise, given the course of your storyline here. But being a student of real life, I'm not surprised. We all choose temptation, even when it's the same thing as choosing to murder a true loving relationship. You've told this story well, with much detail & honesty, good structure & rhyme. I was completely carried away on the breeze. I would've enjoyed a little more imagery thru-out, to bring to mind the eagle & the dove. I felt the reference to dove wasn't even touched upon? Still, it's all good & I enjoyed the read.

[Dash the Reaper]

thanks for the review i will try to use as much imagery as possible the next time

[Ruth]

Some really lovely imagery which is why the ending came as a total surprise to me, well written and made me wonder on the whys :)

[Unknown Poet]

I don't think to forget someone we have to learn to fake feelings or cheat others ...
I observe lots of men do this mistakes ...
As we men I think sometimes flirting can cause us difficulty to find the right person...
Very nicely written... I loved this

[cycy]

what an intereting poem this is...wonder who these eagles and doves are mmmmm curious

[KWP]

Oh man .... So lovey dovey until the last .... Arghhhhhhh .... That's a painful ending to read .... Well played my friend you certainly stirred some emotions X

[Dash the Reaper]

thanks for the review

[Cyndy Robinson]

I love the ending in this. Good poem, I like the rhyme.

[Dash the Reaper]

thanks for the review

[pb]

that was a 'WOOOW' ..this poem had a good rhythme. I enjoyed it..
but, at the second verse u say: : i am was simple ....
is that right?? it looks like u did a mistake..
anyway,good job!

pb

[Dash the Reaper]

thanks for the review ...wanted to say i was ..that must be a typing error

[KLH]

Your words held my attention till the very end. And then you SLAPPED me in the face with an unexpected outcome. I really like the composure of this poem. Very nice.

[Dash the Reaper]

thanks for the review...always wanted to write a something like that

[Riddhi]

Hey its really a nice poem and yes i was especially attracted towards the title..Keep on writing and thanks for sharing..

[Dash the Reaper]

thanks for the review