Look up

When you're feeling down look up at the sky

When you want to hide run onto the stage

When your cheeks get red laugh it off

When you trip and fall get right back up

When the guy says no find someone better

When someone doesn't love you anymore

just think it's their loss

When you fail in life it will make you stonger inside

Reviews

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

Well it's straightforward enough and I think everyone can agree with the message. I'd like to see some poetic devices though, such as metaphor, simile, rhyme, figures of speech verse structure, etc. to spice things up.

As it stands this is more prose than poetry. But don't be discouraged. I can tell from your outlook on life that you will never give up, and this is what is most important.

Cheers, - Ben :)