The Sun and the Star

You called me your star and I

called you my sun,

and we with our bodies of light

became one.

Author's Note

Incredibly short, but I think I like this one.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Perfectionism seems to be found deep in your raged feminism for sure. Raw. Universal. Well polished. Short. Simple. & ironically, way addictive choice of words you cracked here around in ur poetry that, I'm sure, many of 'em (ur lovers/readers) might be "cracking" (inhaling) the maritime marijuana of such articulation you bled in. Very impressive. Short but way "large". Looking fwd to reading you!

[heylel]

Thank you! This has to be one of my favourite reviews of all time. I'm very glad you enjoyed this piece and I really appreciate your thoughts!

[Adam Adams]

And you gon' be my all time fav. as well.

[Asante]

Very sweet and intensely direct! Two people who represent something so far beyond just a body for each other, with the singular feeling serving as enough to turn two into one. :) A beautifully brief piece. Great work!

[heylel]

Thank you so much! I'm very glad you like it!

[Asante]

My pleasure! You're welcome!

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SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL THERE IS NOTHING ELLSE WHAT I CAN SAY

[Mehameha]

I agree. Understated works well here for a great effect. Two lovers have more cues than words when they are caught up with one another. But these would be the right ones for such a moment. Great job. reading more.

[heylel]

aah, thank you so much! I really appreciate your feedback! :)

[PenguinEmpiress]

I can see why you like this one! its so sweet! its short yes but very sweet and cute!