I like the use of pictures within the poem, I would like something longer though. It felt most rushed I think you could have gone more in-depth with social media and religion. Good job though just try to dive a little deeper next time with metaphors, comparison & unity between the two subjects.
Short but with a message that hits home. I gotta admit, the title is freaking great, because it intrigues the reader, and I would have loved to read more about this in the context of expanding the poem, and addressing most of the social issues that many people shy Jesus away. This a good poem, and a reality check. Keep up the great work.
I was intrigued by the title and enjoyed reading and pondering this piece. After reading the reviews, I agree with both Zhavy and Phil. This topic is thought-provoking and very relevant to today's world. You can really run with it. One suggestion is the repetition of "If Jesus." You could do more of these and then end again without one. In ending without this "If Jesus," even if only repeated twice, it really added to the impact of the last two lines.
There are many who would not like the idea of befriending a 'healer'; as they make great profits from exploiting the needy - and - their guilt trip may be too big to handle! But, I get the point of your poignant (seasonal inspired) write - well presented and a good read! :-)
I like the use of pictures within the poem, I would like something longer though. It felt most rushed I think you could have gone more in-depth with social media and religion. Good job though just try to dive a little deeper next time with metaphors, comparison & unity between the two subjects.
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