A Light in This World

Once upon a time

I thought I found love

But it turned out to be

Love in the darkness

And then I met you

I believe I finally know what love is

Through these long months

As we strengthened our friendship

Despite yearning to be close to you

Don’t we almost have it all?

Will life be worth living?

Will the nights be full of warmth, love and passion?

Because after meeting you

I can’t help falling in love

My empty nights spent fantasizing about you

Bonnie Tyler - Total Eclipse of the Heart (Turn Around) (Official Video) - YouTube

Author's Note

What do you do when for most of your life, you've lost your hope for love... And then someone wonderful comes into your life?

Reviews

[JayG]

• What do you do when for most of your life, you've lost your hope for love... And then someone wonderful comes into your life?

If you're into poetry, you write poem that makes the reader feel that way, not be informed on how YOU feel, not via a letter from someone unknown to someone not introduced.

Readers want to be made to feel and care, not be better in formed on the author's life.

At the moment, your approach is the fact-based and author-centric approach we're given in school, as they ready us for the needs of employers. But that nonfiction approach is inherently dispassionate, because the reader cannot know what emotion you would place into the reading, or the situation you're writing in reaction to, to any depth.

Poetry, like fiction, is emotion-based and character centric—an approach to writing not even mentioned as existing in school. So doing a bit of digging into the techniques you'd learn were you to go for a degree in a poetry related subject makes sense.

And I know of no better introduction than Mary Oliver's, A Poetry Handbook. You can download a readable copy from the site-link below (though not on a phone.
https://yes-pdf.com/book/1596

In the end, though, you'll want a hard copy of your own.

Hang in there, and keep on writing.

Jay Greenstein
https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/

[willweb]

I believe what you should do is write a poem about. : ) This was nice, definitely a love poem.