Rise and Shine

Darkness scatters loneliness.

Morning light spreads

new beginnings,

while shadows dance around

us.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Mark]

To me the word "scatters" suggests "dispels", and I am sure you did NOT mean "Darkness dispels loneliness." Perhaps "Darkness gathers...", or "Darkness hoards..." might serve your intent better, then seperate the first and second clauses with a "but", to show their opposition:

"Darkness hoards loneliness, but morning's light spreads new beginnings..."

Just something to think about. The concept, if I failed to say so, is lovely.

[Loner]

Very interesting piece !

[EmpressPoetess]

A very vivid vision! You did a great job!

[SpokenWord]

Very nice job on this one, I liked it.

[Ladysue]

very good. I like this a lot...good work...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem makes me believe that I can take control of my fate
and create my own future. Nice one here!

[Stef Outsiders]

for some reason there truth in this... Lovely done though...

[Brad]

this would go perfect with the story i just wrote, a very poignant piece that tells it in short order...nice job

[Matt Shriver]

Good job

[?]

I have said this time and time, short doesnt matter,
May be short but sometimes few words say the most.
Awesome