Her Eyes

This is a short story I recently wrote. let me know what you think!

When she walks into a room, everyone would stop and stare. It wasn't her mousy brown hair that ensnared everyone so. It wasn't her crazy long eyelashes, either. However, her eyelashes encase her most enchanting feature: her eyes. Her eyes are blue, like the clearest and purest ocean water. Once one looks into her eyes, it's nearly impossible to look away. They hold you there, frozen in time, unable to escape, as if you are prey. They are a trap that is impossible to escape from, a snare that has been set. It's impossible to tell where they begin and where they end. They seem to go on for miles and miles, with twisting turns and secret passageways, where it's easy to lose one's way. In the end, you submit to it, and allow the slick blue walls to close you in. There are no footholds, and you can't escape. Her eyes.

Reviews

[C.A. Lucas]

Beautiful. I really like this because I've always thought that the eyes are the most interesting, informative, and stunning body part on any human being. I love your metaphors and imagery, too.

[writingcrazy55555]

Thank you! I love to write about eyes. I think that they are one of the most intriguing and interesting topics to write about.

[Fiona]

love the word enchanting, it really added a new aspect to the story :o amazing detail!