Memories

A poem I wrote today.

Memories

 Are like

Broken shards of glass,

Where I can only see

A small part

Of myself,

Maybe just

An eye

Or a strand

Of hair.

Their jagged,

Uneven edges

Look as if

The pieces could

Never

Fit

Together,

But they do.

Each piece fits

Together,

 Like a puzzle.

And in that puzzle,

I can see my entire face,

Staring back at it.

They create

A complete picture

Of myself,

An image.

Memories.

 

Reviews

[Daniel Eckert]

A very good piece. I enjoyed it, thank you for sharing it with us.

[b.platte]

I liked the way you separated this and made me pause at certain times. It was effective and I liked this a lot. There was a lot of truth in this poem in a way I've never heard it before.

[writingcrazy55555]

Thank you! I'm very glad you liked it!

[SmileBig :)]

Wow...this is so good! Well done.

[writingcrazy55555]

Thanks! :)

[kublakhan27]

Nice metaphor and flow to it^^

[writingcrazy55555]

Thank you!

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[demureminds]

I liked the message behind this. It's as if our past makes us who we are no matter how terrible it was, everything we do molds us into who we are.

[writingcrazy55555]

Yes, our past determines our identity. Without it, we would be nonexistant.

[C.A. Lucas]

I love this! I have no criticism, this piece is perfect. I love the way you make a whole new line for important words to emphasize the meaning.

[writingcrazy55555]

I'm glad you like it! :)

[prepre1007]

I love how you repeat Memories twice. Once at the beginning and the end. The poem flows nicely and makes it easy to read. I read this poem to my brother. He ignored me once I said this is your poem. Good job.

[writingcrazy55555]

Thanks prepre!

[David the writer]

This was really good. I like how your stanzas are short, but they feel like their a lead-in. Really good!

[Globy]

I loved the flow. very easy read. I loved the way it starts and ends with the same word. Memories.

Globy
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[writingcrazy55555]

Thanks!