Memory Seishun no Hikari

Poem about memories

If a memory is just a file

If it is really intangible

Then is it truly just ours?

Can we change it?

If no one remembers it,

did it happen?

 

If we remember something one way, does it matter if it was changed?

If I rewrite my own memory of someone as if they never existed--

then they didn't.

 

Memories are just like us,

what we make of them.

Should I choose it, I can rewrite myself.

Reviews

[Edward Clay]

the first four images in this poem are questions, which immediately distracts me as a reader. i find myself, not being able to focus on the actual content, but am nstead asking myself, "what's with all the questions". it's as if the poem isn't sure of itself, which is probably the case, but it's a bit too much to start with. it's not showing or telling the reader. does that make sense? i've rambled, haha.

saying all that though, the final stanza is really strong, and is actually really well written. a great alst line. if the beginnin was stronger, and less questioning, it could really read well as a poem.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

It is said that sensory memory corresponds approximately to the initial 200 - 500 milliseconds after an item is perceived, so we can be forgiven if recalling such things seem abit 'fuzzy'. However I do recall a Single by Morning Musume having the same title. (Memory: The light of youth)

A very creatively interesting, enjoyable and well delivered write!

God's Blessing
Phillozofee