Silent killer.

The silent killer

stalks you in the night

footsteps echo

which gives you a fright.

You know some ones there

just a couple steps behind you

but you seem to not care.

The silent killer

get ready to strike

and takes  stabs

to the right

You fall to the ground
 
squirming with fright,

That silent killer,

 in the night.

Author's Note

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Reviews

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wow~~such a haunting poem--wonderful~~~!!!

:)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

What a creepy frightful creative poem!

[The Cute 1]

this is awesome

[Arien Bleuefire]

creepy but great poem!! the rhyming is almost like the rhythm of the foot steps as the silent killer comes to get u!!! GREAT poem!!! :)

[just is]

Kind of haunting write well put together awesome imagery

[chillz]

0.o {{looks around for the killer}} nice write ^_^

[PaperHearts]

Oooh, that was definitely a creepy write! I liked the atmosphere of the poem, and the way in which you wrote it using short sentences, which seemed to evoke a sense of mystery and hesitation. Aveira's right though; you need to go back and proof-read. For such an awesome concept, it would be a shame if you didn't. :P Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Marlena]

I like your idea, and your kind of haunting voice in the poem, but you need to do some damage control. You have some grammar issues that are hindering how the poem should sound, like "footsteps" is one word, "someone's", and the biggest being your mix up of "witch" and "which". This is a creepy poem you're going for, and you need to clean those up before it can really hit home.

[Wolf]

nice write