Love Follows

A promise of the heart

I wish I could hold you forever

For the rest of our lives together

Keep you by my side

As my love song and my guide

 

I'd leave my home behind

And follow where you lead to

If only you would let me be

One in spirit with you

 

Don't let the sun fade

In my eyes that see this dream

Claim me as your own

And I will forever be

Reviews

[Erin Was Here.]

I love this!
The rhyme pattern (as Daniel said) adds beauty to your poem. I love the last stanza especially:
"Don't let the sun fade

In my eyes that see this dream

Claim me as your own

And I will forever be."

Beautiful.

Well......

:) This is an amazing piece here :) hehehe... I wanted to come up with a little tense moment.

You have great fundamentals, I like its simplicity and impact. You have a winner here :)

A wonderful piece

[Daniel]

Whoa! I just read it and I was IMing one of my friends and I told him it's amazing! :D

I love it! Also, I like how you go from rhyme pattern abab to only rhyming the second and fourth lines. Great job! =D

This was really great!