Hymn of Despair

a chant or lullaby of sorts, used with reverence

Oh, I pray 

Ye Angels deliver me from 

This dark and this despair,

Lift me up 

Upon your wings and

Hear my fervent prayer, 

Watch the dark 

And cold shadows 

For he is in his lair,  

But rescue me 

This tortured soul with 

Such a cross to bear

Author's Note

What advice can you give?

Reviews

[Dalrymple]

Rhythm is good. SECTIONS... Prayer from dark, uplifting prayer, evil one, prayer with cross to bear. Middle... Up.. Down.. Middle. These sections work for you. It's too short for a lot of critique, but it's short and sweet, shall we say.

[Extant]

Advice is not needed, I don't think you should change it. I imagine the journey of the angels to you, your cross and the hope. I like it.