Future Re-visited

A Lonely path doesn't scare me

I have walked long this way.

I crossed the crowded lanes,

gardens and tunnels meant for trains.

Endless the wishes go

as far as I could see the river flow.

Limited on things I could carry

choices I have to make

The heart is never content till mine I could say

but I am limited to choose what along I could take.

 

Someday conquering would no more please

Someday the pleasure of just seeing beautiful things around I would feel

Someday I would walk along a stranger

re-visiting the days spent together

we would not say "Sorry"

just walk along, having nothing to worry

At that point where our path split

stand for a moment and re-think

learning from past mistakes

discuss and agree

upon a path, we both could together walk

May be, being more than a stranger

who just faded as time passed by

 

 

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Enrapturing poem speaking of the sanguine hopes for a careless future where worry is no more, and where people may just be without worrying about what others may think of them, and focusing instead of the beauty that so quickly passes us by especially since we are so focused on one thing that we do not notice them . . . Well done.

[Ron]

I think the first verse of this may be your best work. Lines 3 & 4 I simply adore! Worthy of Robert Frost!

[bouncing]

You are so good, I can relate to this one and I love every line in this amazing poem

[Shaquana Adams]

May be, being more than a stranger
who just faded as time passed by

Favorite lines. This is really good. Keep writing :)
-QuanaWana

[Leslie Philibert]

This is an excellent poem. Just some small points
L1 needs either an article and another verb, try A lonely path doesn`t scare me.
ment is a typo, you mean..meant try too...
Days of conquering no longer please
Just these days of pleasure of seeing what I feel

[sushi]

Thanks... I missed them :)

Have now made d changes

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, amazing write. This poem flows so well together, nicely penned. :-)

Kaze~ :-)

[sushi]

Thank you :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)