A Salute to TRUE RELATIONS

I now leave my home place

To a new town to make it mine.

I leave back on my way, all

Those memories I shared with you, and

Dedicate my thanks through shining diamonds

From eye, with a hope to reach my place...

On my way, I see things around me

Move past, to signify the future coming.

The strong wind blows against me,to

Stop me with might. The trees move -- to and fro,

To uproot and fall on path.

The clouds spread tears to tell

What it feels and the master-planner --

Hid behind these, stole lights to, not to let me flee...

To each's strom and tears, I placed an end.

Moved on and on, with a hope to reach my place.

I spent all my pen's ink to fill my papers

With stop. One fine day, I woke and read

to stand different to the thought it ment.

To know ' what it ment? ', I turned

Around I saw "all end, all ful-stop

followed" to say "my care continues...."

My search in my journey gave, You to Me

Forever to me, Hope as a shadow following me.

Reviews

[gravitylava]

I really liked this... it felt like a conversion type thing, like you were in a timid crisis and are now more on your way to becoming more spiritually stable. the lyrical quality here is super well done, and the bits of actual speech
(i.e., I woke and read
to stand different to the thought it ment.
To know ' what it ment? ', I turned
Around I saw "all end, all ful-stop
followed" to say "my care continues....")

That was my favorite part.
good job!

[Jvl narasimharao]

This is a simple and profound poem.It is very natural too
yoursJVL

[abhas]

crafty and mesmerising... the words seem to blend in to this feeling that you've portrayed so well...

[barricade]

beautiful write! i loved it! 1

[Dream Weaver]

A colossal etching of words
that structure relations of the
truest sense “Devine”…

[lavina k.]

Nice write....with sweet description of how you are moving on in your life....
"On my way, I see things around me
Move past, to signify the future coming."
Beautiful lines representing how you are strengthened to forget your past....
Keep writing!!!!!!!

[Sravan]

loved it.... and dont ever say u dont know english...
coz if u dont have the command over the language then u cannot write stuffs so lovely like this... keep the good work going... tc.. love u