Weary

Difficult times

Why do I feel so sad when all I want to do is smile?

Wanting what I don't have...

Why can't I just wait awhile?

 

Hate to make myself feel this way

Wish it would vanish

Every moment, everyday

 

Torturing myself deep within

No one can tell

Not family... not even friends

 

Tell myself; always remember

I may not be perfect

Yet I am a winner!

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Why do we do what we do to ourselves. This is a wisely penned poem.

[Forgiven]

Thank you :)

[Antoñyo]

Well-expressed raw emotion that questions deeper than the words, but leaves room for hope.

Thank you for sharing

[Forgiven]

Thanks for the review!

[Writer #00]

This poem is so sad, the feelings of the narrator driving home in the third stanza when he/she recognizes his/her self-torture and no one can identify it but her/him. : (

Then you add a nice, positive turn at the end-- a message we should all think about! I suppose, in terms of suggestions, the only thing I'd suggest changing would be the conjunction 'yet' in the final line to 'but' just because it sounds more contradictory to the idea of an imperfect loser...I don't know, just a suggestion (preference, really). Beautiful poem!!!!

[Forgiven]

Thanks for the review!

[Troy Henson]

how we hide our emotions and feelings is a craft. Dont hide is all I can say.
Great tone in this and I like like the way finished on a positive note.
Smile.

Kind Regards
Troy

[Forgiven]

Smiling :-) Thnx!

[Johanna]

Really sweet and sad poem, nicely penned! :)

[Forgiven]

Thank you!