Futility

 

Somewhere in my head I build a lie

 

Just in order to survive

 

My feelings for her will never die

 

But hers for me were never alive

Reviews

[James K. Blaylock]

Very sad, really. Congrats, on the win!

jkb

[Imperfection]

So much sadness in your words.

Its so tragic when we feel so strongly about someone and our feelings are not returned.
Yet this is life.
Like it or not, we have to accept it.

I liked this piece a lot.
It is hard to express so much and so strongly in such few words.
Thanks for entering it into my contest.

[Damien Dsoul]

It sure is an exercise in futility, but what's captivating is how creatively ingenious you protrayed your desire of never letting go in your words. It projects comprehending message in the poem and puts feeling in the narrator's words and thoughts.

[Damien Dsoul]

It sure is an exercise in futility, but what's captivating is how creatively ingenious you protrayed your desire of never letting go in your words. It projects comprehending message in the poem and puts feeling in the narrator's words and thoughts.

[O!]

Im reading thing again...and this time ur words 'Just in order to survive' make me cry.

x,
O!

[O!]

typo: where (were)...a recurring typo with u, me noticed

ive realised something...u arent in love with her either....ure in love with love...and since it was with her u give her the credit of feeling what u feel....am sure she started it for u...but in the long run, u fell in love with love....and that cant be her, love isnt what shes done/did to u...

hope ure able to realise that one day and let her go.....

x
O!