20 words

Rain,

flowers bending in the wind.

Beauty of simple things

seen through a window pane.

 

Memories, to keep you warm

 

                ~~~

 

Beauty of simple things.

Rain, flowers bending in the wind

seen through a window pane.

Memories to keep you warm

Author's Note

20 words... Which arrangement do you prefer? Top or bottom?

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

I like the top-I get a good image from it bottom as well but stronger from the top piece
the way you have set this up to get reader involved is very creative
very nice arrangement of 20 words truly
thank you for sharing

[Being Me]

Thank you for commenting... the top one was the original one then I tend to over think things and tried to make it more "correct". I like the top one more too, though I think grammar / language-wise the bottom one technically is better probably?