As the water trickles, I'm in desperate need of a friend

Well, I guess you can say it's from a trees perspective....

 

As the water trickles, I’m in need of a friend

As the water trickles down my leaves

I drown in bitterness of loneliness

I sprawl my branches

Anxious for a hug from a child

Desperate for a lonesome friend

 

As the water trickles down my leaves

I gaze into the dazzling sun

Feel the water and breeze

I am surrounded by Mother Nature

Desperate for a lonesome friend

 

As the water trickles down my leaves

I don’t comprehend my solitude

It’s absurd how I came to be

Such a state shouldn’t be reached

Desperate for a lonesome friend

 

As the water trickles down my leaves

I discover the fallacy of my mind

I’m around people

Somehow it doesn’t seem true

Still desperate for a lonesome friend

 

As the water trickles down my face

I discern my true emotions

Find that not a soul really cares

I start to drown in my oblivion

Desperate for a lonesome friend

 

…as the water trickles down my face

I’m desperate for a lonesome friend

…One that truly cares

 

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think, even constuctive critisism.

Reviews

[fred...]

I love the theme of the poem.

[Jess Cook]

i love the repeating lines.

[Poeticpiers]

i liked the theme very much but the lack of meter made it jerky to read