From Hell

Lyrical about a sad man who sinned his whole life and has reviewed his mistakes.

Feeling the pain drain from my blood stained chains,

Reaping the pasts creeping to my minds inner shames,

Omitting through my brain the distruction of my reins,

Mouthing out the words infecting any tamed,

 

Housing all thoughts of curupted pandora box,

Even to this day holding any seen as lost,

Living without cost the life i wished i crossed,

Learning evermore the damnation i exaust,

 

I can't take the pressure of the path seen as simple,

 

Amazed at the sight of my futuristic limbo,

Dazed to the thought of the goated symbol,

Miserably i wait to the fight towards this figure,

I know not of an escape instead i pursue my inner,

To find the final days pleasant, from the eyes of this sinner...

Author's Note

look down the side

Reviews

[DeadToTheWorld]

It's full of emotion...I enjoyed this...nice job.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

scary stuff, but amazing detail and descriptions! good work!

[Dream Weaver]

Sharp as ever RTB nice stuff brother!

[Brad]

this is some of your best work

[Addie]

Very intense and emotional. The acrostic was really clever! Good work. =]

[HorrorMaster]

very good

[A.Lee]

Its like an acrostic. Creative and yet you kept the serious tone very well. Lots of imagery. Good work.

[Middling]

*curupted-Corrupted
*exaust -Exhaust

This is a good poem, with alot of good imagery, not so sure about the message down the side though... maybe if it was an advertisement or somethig like that... but i dont think that sort of thing has its place in poetry... :)

[Dinesh Sairam]

The first stanza looked more like rap and god knows I hate rap. But all the other stanzas were too good.

"To find the final days pleasant, from the eyes of this sinner"

Splendid usage of words mate :)

Keep writing.